okay
Drum roll at arouind 30 seconds is good, although possibily a little anticlimatic.
At about 40 something second you remove the ride? why? it makes the music feel a bit bare, especially as you already had that bassline before removing the ride, it just seems a little non-sensical to me.
At about 47/48 seconds in the bass line goes out of tune, it might be your own input but personally i'm not too keen on it.
Strings are quite nice, if a little too powerful, the next melody instrument is also nice, if adding little to the melodic material. ONce again you remove the ride somwhere around here?
The new instrument then seems to get a little quieter at about 1:24, when i beleive it works perfectly well in the foreground of the music, but this might be the nature of the VST
the breakdown works well, sounds nice.
The end becomes repetetive.
and i know its vague, but i just dont like the final string melody you create from 2:44 onwards.
Hopefully that gives you some things to work on.
Keep trying, you've definately got potential.